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The signal came like it used to, in the old days, during the war. The smoke burned a pale color tinged green. It rose in wispy clouds from the top of Blue Ridge. Quick winds brushed it out across the sky like watercolor paint on blue paper.

Jonah spied it not long after the sun had come up as he often had when the war was about.

He ate what was left of yesterday’s kill and finished off a strip of jerky he’d gotten from the Goodwife Hetty a few weeks before. She was the only one who bought things from him since Pastor Sykes had died.

He gathered his old musket, checked his powder was dry, and counted his musket balls: twenty—more than he had the powder for. There would be time to remedy that. He packed away his meager belongings and turned from the game trail that he had been following and began heading for the rally point.

It had been agreed upon long before that if the Blue Ridge Boys were ever needed again, they would meet at the old town by Clearwater Creek.  There was a stone church there with an accompanying rectory and graveyard filled with headstones—none younger than five years.

It took him the better part of the afternoon to reach the creek and then an hour into evening until he came upon the church, just before the sunset.

Coming from the direction of the creek bed, only the steeple of the old church and a few treetops were visible. Jonah moved upstream of the church to an earthen dam made from the collapsed structure of a burned out millhouse. He looped around the village then walked up a small rise and found himself a space in between the trees to get a good look at the church before he moved in on it.  

There were tents and people crowded near the church’s entrance. Horses and oxen were lined near the graveyard and lazily chewed grass. A few of the men carried muskets—mostly whitebeards mixed in with a few big farmer types.  Women bustled about the camp, some cooking, some washing, a few others herded children.

Standing in the middle of them, he saw an unmistakable figure dressed in a summer blue dress. He would have recognized that dress anywhere, Mayor Montreaux’s wife, Dellah. She bustled to and fro, speaking with a number of people and gesturing toward the burned out buildings around her. In the dying light, her milk white skin shone as bright as the moon. Jonah grimaced.

He stood up from the hillside and hallooed, waiving his hat and holding his arms up in the air. A burly farmer pointed his finger at Jonah and shouted to the others. Soon the whole camp had their eyes fixed on the dark figure coming from the trees.

“Who goes there?” somebody shouted.

“Jonah!” the mountain man shouted back.

Nobody spoke to Jonah as he wended his way through the fires toward the church. A few ladies’ noses wrinkled when he passed them by—shopwives who preferred lilacs to the smell of a human being.

“Jonah, I almost did not recognize you,” Dellah called out to Jonah. He stopped and turned, head cocked to the side. She continued, “Have you got a moment to chat?”

“Yes ma’am.”

In her prime, Dellah had been a beautiful woman, Jonah knew, but the years and the children she bore had dragged her down. She sagged a little more now and the gray on her head stuck out quite more noticeably than the last time the two exchanged words.

“Jonah, I am afraid I have some terrible news,” she said after a moment. “The Major is dead.”

“What got him?”


“Sad way for a fighting man to go,” Jonah replied. He glanced absently at the people around them. They looked back at him from the darkness with a queer curiosity in their eyes. A few of the younger ones, who didn’t know him, gave him wide berth.

“What is everyone doing here?” Jonah asked.

“Do you not know?”

“I live in the forest,” Jonah retorted.

“The Major was out Deer Valley way, out by the settlement. Said it was abandoned, said it looked like some trouble.”


“No, he said it was something else. We think it was the Natives. He had a wound, but he never said much about it until he fell over. He died only a few minutes later.”

“When did he die?”

“Two weeks back,” Dellah replied.

Jonah sucked in a sharp breath. Only two men were able to give the order to set the fires to the ridge: the Major, and Captain Lyon. And Captain Lyon was missing since the end of the war.

“Somebody killed the folks in Deer Valley?” Jonah asked when the silence ran too long.

“We think so. Coming from the Major, the news was worthy enough that my husband decided it was best we do something about it. The church will make a fine fortress while we wait for troops to arrive.”

“Has anybody else gone to Deer Valley?”

“We ran into Winston Meyers about one week ago. He went off to have a look and then vanished. They found his body on the northern road this morning. Terrible thing that.”

“I cannot say I really knew Winston that well,” Jonah shrugged. “Only shared my campfire with him once or twice.”  

There was another long gap in the conversation. Then Jonah asked, “Has anybody else come into camp since this morning?”

“We only just arrived, actually.”

Jonah looked back at the ridge. A cloud lingered over it. It might have been smoke but more likely just a thin fog. Most nights the ridge was cloaked with mist.

The question of who had lit the fire played through Jonah’s mind. Most everyone agreed that Captain Lyon was dead, though when he had died was more of a mystery. The romantic theory was that he had lost his purpose in life after the war and ended himself with a pistol. Others contended that Lyon had simply run off. For his part, Jonah agreed with neither.  Two years ago he came across an old campfire and found Lyon’s old troop jacket with about twenty patches sewn into it, rotting in the branches of a tree. There was days old blood nearby. It seemed simple enough.

Somebody had set that fire though. If it wasn’t the Major and it wasn’t Lyon, then another of the Blue Ridge Boys had and whoever that was, he wouldn’t have done it without a very good reason.

“Jonah,” Dellah said in a hushed voice, “I wonder if I might ask you a favor.”

“Yes, ma’am?”

“Word didn’t reach everyone at the same time about what was going on in Deer Valley. I wonder if you might set out tomorrow morning and head toward town and see if you can find them and direct all of those people here.”

“Be happy to,” Jonah replied quickly.

“Very good,” Dellah smiled that white smile of hers. “We have got a bit of food from the town stores, help yourself to some bread and pork if you like.”

“I would be much obliged. Could use some more powder as well. If you got it.”

“I’ll see what I can do for you.”

Jonah picked a stretch of ground outside the church that night and helped himself to a little firewood. He cooked a simple meal and prepared himself for the journey to town. It wouldn’t be far, just a mile by the old road and then another five or six toward town after that. As the rest of the camp settled into an uneasy slumber, Jonah doused his fire, spread the coals and slept in their warmth.

He woke just before dawn, when the air felt the clearest. The camp was quiet save for the crackling of a few fires. A few sentries were posted. Jonah chatted with them. They seemed more weary than nervous. None of them offered much more information than what Dellah had volunteered the previous evening.

When the sun began coming over Blue Ridge, Jonah struck out. He eschewed the forest and stuck to the road, where the refugees would be. He kept a shot ready in his musket and his tomahawk on his hip.

The road took a fairly straight path through the forest, occasionally fording small streams here and there. Where it connected to the main road, the forest gave way to river valley and farmland. It was a wide way and even sported a few sturdy bridges that had survived a flood or two in their day. The farmers had put up their fences here, built from stones taken out of their fields.

Not far beyond the junction, he found a pair of corpses—a boy, about fourteen, and his horse. The boy was laid out about ten feet in front of the animal. His neck had twisted back at a funny angle. At the corner of the child’s mouth a little blood had gathered and run down his cheek.

The horse was an old chestnut plough animal. It had collar scars from years of hard toil in the dirt. Blood crusted its nostrils and withers.  Its hooves had churned up the road quite violently before it succumbed to death.

Jonah surmised that the boy, whoever he was, had ridden his horse too hard and it had faltered here on the road and thrown him head first into the hard pack. A farm boy ought to have known better.

Unless something scared him more than the thought of going over the ears of his animal.

Jonah pressed on.

The road toward Blue Ridge Township wound up the valley, following the river for a while. From there the Blue Ridge dominated the right side of the trail. It rose sharply from the valley floor, an impassable wall of rock and vegetation. The only way through it was Bear Gap, a narrow cut in the mountainside, large enough for most wagons to pass through.

Within sight of Bear Gap was the crossroads which led to Deer Valley to the north and Smokey Hill to the south. And it was there that Jonah saw the native man.

Coming up the road, there was little cover to approach. Farmers had long since cleared the area and an old inn stood on the corner. Jonah kept one hand on the sling of his musket and the other hovered over the head of his tomahawk.

The native man stood directly in the middle of the crossroads, a gun and rusted cavalry sword in his hand. When he saw Jonah, he made no effort to hide, nor did he raise his gun. He simply lifted his shoulders and stuck out his chin.  Jonah recognized him then.

“Micah,” Jonah shouted. It wasn’t the man’s real name, but Jonah couldn’t remember his Native one.

“Something very strange here,” he said in unbroken English. Micah was a product of the Catholic school for Natives down in Smokey Hill.

“Where did you come from?” Jonah asked.

“Bridger’s Ridge,” Micah said, pointing to the opposite side of the valley.

“That is a fair distance.”

“It is,” agreed Micah.

“The Major is dead,” said Jonah.

“Yes.” Micah adjusted the musket on his shoulder. “I have lost my tribe.”

“I am sure that you can find them again.”

“I do not think they can be found,” said Micah. “Not where they are now, anyway.”


Micah shrugged.

“I am going down into town. You want to come with me?”

Micah nodded slowly.

They started for the gap. From the crossroads the forest took over again and then it was about a half hour to the top of the little pass. From there the road descended rapidly into a grove of dogwoods and then spit its travelers directly into the main street of the Blue Ridge Township.

Before they ever reached the dogwoods, Jonah and Micah saw the smoke beyond them. The pungent odor of freshly burned wood clung to the air. Both men unslung their weapons and set the locks. They trotted down the road the rest of the way, feet silent as cats.

A few fires still burned in the town.  The largest building, the mercantile, smoldered angrily. There were bodies too.

Three had died a few yards apart. The man closest to Jonah had fallen face first onto the hard pack. A savage blow had nearly taken his head off. It rested at a funny angle now.  By the man’s hand was a musket, the flint still locked.

“They did not die so easy,” Micah said of the other two bodies, pointing with his sabre. They were two boys, maybe teenagers. Their cause of death was not so simple to ascertain as the older man. He knelt beside one of the boys. He laid face up, eyes open and his insides spilt on the street. Something had gnawed on his face a while and then given up.

“I think a dog has been at them,” Jonah said.

“No,” Micah said. He was at the other body. “They still have their eyes. No animal has been at them yet. This was people.”

“Why would people kill them? They do not look to be much of a threat. Unless they were¬…” Jonah stopped himself and looked at Micah.

“Natives?” Micah shook his head, “I told you that I have lost my tribe.” Micah stood from the body and looked about. “Did you hear that?”

Jonah stood. Micah unsheathed his sword. Jonah readied his musket. Except for the crackling of unspent fire, the town was quiet.

“Footsteps,” Micah whispered.

“Blue Ridge!” came a shout from nowhere. The surprise of it almost caused Micah to fire on nothing. The shout came again. “Blue Ridge!”

Jonah recognized the call. He shouted back, “Like ghosts!”

There was a pause, then a clatter of feet. A man emerged from the crumbling mercantile wearing a blanket of soot. He was broad, all muscles and power, and tall too. He dwarfed Jonah and Micah, even from a few paces away. In his massive hands he carried a prized long rifle.

“Jonah, that you?” the man squinted.


“That is me,” returned them man.

“What are you doing here?” Jonah asked. He lowered his musket and took a few steps toward Leadbelly.

“Saw the fire,” Leadbelly replied. His eyes switched toward Blue Ridge for half a second.

“You see what happened to them?” Jonah pointed to the bodies.

“No,” Leadbelly shrugged. “Looks like Natives.” He looked at Micah.

“No,” said Micah.

“Somebody did it,” Jonah said.

“If not Natives, who?” said Leadbelly.

“Maybe bandits. I do not know. The rest of the villagers are up…” Jonah paused. He felt a tickle in his ear just then—a whispered word that he could not discern.  He turned around and looked up at the Blue Ridge.

Smoke poured from its top, tinged green. Leadbelly turned and saw it too.

“Is that the Major?” he whispered.

“No,” Jonah replied. He looked at the other two men. Their eyes were glued to the smoking ridgeline. “We should head for the old church now. The town folk are all up that way. They need to know what is happening.”

They left the bodies in the street and started for Bear Gap. By Jonah’s lead they shadowed the road on either side, moving quietly through the dogwood trees toward the open top of the gap.

As they neared it, Jonah heard the word in his ear again. He held up his hand for the others to stop. They looked at him with raised brows.

“You hear that?” Jonah asked.

“What?” Leadbelly replied.

Jonah held a finger to his lips and listened. Another sound came, a different sound, far away. It came from the other side of the gap. At that point, Jonah and the others were only a few hundred yards from the crest of the road.

“Musket,” Micah said suddenly. Then there was another pop. Leadbelly and Jonah nodded in swift agreement. Jonah felt a tingle go down his spine that he hadn’t felt in a long time.

“Bandits?” Leadbelly asked. He started unslinging his rifle. “I will go have a look.”

“Do not be gone long,” Jonah replied. Leadbelly smiled and trotted up the road toward the rise. They watched from a distance. Micah produced a small spyglass from his pocket and followed Leadbelly’s progress up the road. Another shot on the air. Leadbelly paused then continued.

Just as his compatriot was coming to the crest of the road, Jonah felt a shiver in his back and something whispered in his ear—the words that he could not understand. A moment later, a man crested the hill, almost in front of Leadbelly.

Leadbelly fired and missed. He swung the rifle around and lunged at the man, using the butt as a club. Micah and Jonah were on their feet, running for the crest when a second man came forth and waylaid Leadbelly with an axe or pick. At the distance, Jonah couldn’t tell. The man fell on Leadbelly a moment later and an inhuman cry raced across the space between them.

Then there were more men on the hill, they shouted and chanted. Some stopped at Leadbelly’s writhing figure. The others had caught sight of the two approaching men and gave a screaming chase.

“Run!” Jonah shouted. Micah had thought of that already though and was sprinting full speed toward the forest. Jonah took off running in the other direction toward town. The men followed him, hard on his heels.

He scrambled through the dogwood patch and then broke into the open of the town at full clip. Fumbling with the musket, he turned and took a running shot at the first man through the trees. The ball went wide, clipping a branch instead.

Charred buildings raced by Jonah as he rushed through the town. He shot past the three bodies on main street, clearing the last one with a graceless leap, before diving headlong down an alley between a bank and the mercantile. On the other side the forest had grown close to the town and he sprinted for it. The cries of the savage men behind him diminished quickly as he wrapped himself in the safety of the trees.

Jonah kept running until his feet gave out. He sprawled out into a stream and bit down on his tongue, hard. He jerked his head up and pulled himself out of the water and onto the bank.  Jonah wouldn’t wait there to catch his breath. He struggled upward and staggered onward. To where, he didn’t know.

Behind him, the smoke climbed higher over Blue Ridge.
What happened in Deer Valley?

Part 2
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Given 2014-02-25
Western with a twist: Blue Ridge by Sirius-the-Dog ( Suggested by xlntwtch and Featured by neurotype )
FluffyLover1986 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014
Well this seems to be taking some liberties with history. Cannibalistic Iroquois? Since when? And which war? Revolutionary? 1812? Doubtful it's Civil, because the action takes place in the Blue Ridge mountains, which I just googled/wiki'd up, and they're in the Appalachians, meaning that this is still around the time of the early U.S., but we don't know which particular year.

A decent piece, I suppose, but it just feels a bit too vague for me to really get into.

That said, it is encouraging that finally, there's a way to get DDs for writing that isn't some sort of wangst-laced poetry.

Kudos on that end.
Sirius-the-Dog Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well I suppose it's not for everybody. I admit that I was being intentionally vague in some areas. For some people, it is enough while others, such as yourself, prefer more.

It sounds though, that you were not confused, just confounded, and I will take what I can from that. I am planning a continuation. Of what length and caliber I cannot say, because it isn't finished. If, however, you would be so gracious to seek out the sequel at another time and give your opinion, I would be happy to hear it.

Thank you too, for the encouragement. Don't hate on the poets too much though. Making meaningful poetry that resonates with a lot of people is so hard, and recognition of a good try is sometimes helpful.

FluffyLover1986 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
Confounded indeed, namely because I was interested in the historical context, and trying to get my head around when exactly this is happening. But decent, non-cliched writing seems to be hard to find for me. So much YA and stories revolving around "super duper fantasy powers", which are necessary IMO (so GRRM kind of gets DQ'd here =/), but far from sufficient on this end.

AKA I used to like the warcraft universe, back before Blizzard destroyed the lore with WoW :(
TVPaw3366 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014
Sirius-the-Dog Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :). You are a lovely.
TVPaw3366 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
Ur so welcum and tnx
MistyDawnAmara Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is beautiful and mysterious. I love the historical context, all the notice you've given to the trials of the time. I grew up just hours east of the Blue Ridge; your descriptions are so perfect, I couldn't say anything more about the mountains than you already have. Is there more to this? You've certainly gotten my curiosity piqued.
Sirius-the-Dog Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :) I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Even though I took many liberties, I definitely got a lot of inspiration from the actual Blue Ridge for this story. While none of the places are actually real, they are pieced together like a quilt from my memories.

As for more?

Yes. We still don' know what happened in Deer Valley ;)
MistyDawnAmara Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I look forward to it ^^
RhynWilliams Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014   Traditional Artist
wow, well done!
Sirius-the-Dog Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading it. :)
RhynWilliams Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014   Traditional Artist
most welcome!
TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation! :clap:
Sirius-the-Dog Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :) I appreciate your taking some time to read it.
TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD, it was a great read! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :party:
Sirius-the-Dog Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for reading :)
lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure! :love: by CookiemagiK
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014   Writer

An excellent story, written the way I like, lean and mean. There are a couple of typos, but they pale beside the story itself. And a cliffhanger--I like that too. You leave a lot to the imagination, which can always use a stretch. At the same time, you don't lose readers by leaving out too much. I'd like to read more about the Blue Ridge Boys and hope you'd like to write more about them. Some time back, I read this and fav'd it so I can't fav it again, but I can say more readings are a revelation of sorts. I can't help but think of zombies as the problem sometimes, even aliens. You haven't left me in the dust of just saying so. Good. The mountain man is well-described (as are others) by different characters' reactions to him, not just out-and-out description. I could go on and on. Thanks for a good and horrifying read.

Sirius-the-Dog Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the comment xlnt! It's those bloody typos as always. No matter how many times I read a piece, I miss them. God it is frustrating. As my writing shows, I was never one for the minute. It's a problem.

Glad that you enjoyed the minimalism here. Also, the comment on characterization makes me happy. I spent the first draft of this story writing a whole bunch of description for Jonas, and then tearing it out with an axe. Subtlety trumps my heavy handed first approach, as always (even though my first approach was some 1,000 word shorter... I have no idea how I can cut so much and wind up with extra words).

Cheers, old bean.
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014   Writer

You're welcome. It's good to cut extra stuff out, but some things often ends longer, I've found.

You find new things for the characters to do, instead of just describing them.

Anyway, I like this and say "cheers" to you, too.

saartha Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer

A riddle-story, huh. I admit this has me stumped. Not for lack of trying, because this really drew me in.

The characterization and reveal of details is excellently paced. I never felt like things were moving too quickly or being bogged down, which can be extremely hard to accomplish. This is a great bit of horror/mystery--just enough to keep you spellbound without falling into the trap of over-explaining, as so many do.

I enjoyed the detached, old-soldier manner of the main character, his minimalism. It's a refreshing change. The others--Leadbelly and Micah, and even Dellah, were woven into the narrative quite neatly.

Who set the fire, what the hell happened to the natives, was it Lyon or is that a red herring, is this all related to 'the war'--and if not, why is someone targeting the Blue Ridge Boys--, what's up with the cannibalism and why did the Major die of fever instead of his injuries, why was Leadbelly at the town instead of meeting at the church as agreed, aghhh.

I'll be keeping an eye on this--can't wait for you/a more discerning reader to put out the reveal! 

Sirius-the-Dog Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
What a lovely reply you have written me. It is rife with all the things I like in a reply--questions. Thank you for the comment on my minimalistic approach. When I write, I write thick and fat, and when I edit, I cut the suet from the meat, but it is a painful process. Appreciation makes the whole thing seem worthwhile. Thank you for that.

As for what happens in Deer Valley...

I'm looking forward to finding out.
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